Honda Generator
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- JCSaiKrishna
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Honda Generator
Kindly rate the copy writing out of 10.
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i liked the first one..."silence uninterrupted"....direct yet simple!
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Thank you Pooja, I am doing my intern in Ogilvy, Bangalore, trying to secure a job. So in process of preparing my portfolio. Do the above works worth a place in a copy writer's portfolio?
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ohhh thats great! wel m not that experienced to comment on that coz m too in the learning process...al the best for your portfolio...and obviously you will secure a good job! 
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Thank Q Poojajainpooja29 wrote:ohhh thats great! wel m not that experienced to comment on that coz m too in the learning process...al the best for your portfolio...and obviously you will secure a good job!
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Hi! see, your headlines talk about lack on interruption. But your copy ends with 'running'. If you can tie that up somewhere, I think these will go a few 100 extra points! Just my two bits!
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i agree with paromita. Just tie the headline with the end of the copy
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Thank you mates. I will adopt your suggestion, I really liked it.
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I had made some changes visually, pls let me knw if this better than the earlier one.JCSaiKrishna wrote:Kindly rate the copy writing out of 10.
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OPTION 01
Entertainment Uninterupted
Explore the joy of exhilaration with all your appliances loaded with power all the time. With the new auto-switch honda 760R running, your entertainment will never be interrupted.
OPTION 02
Box Office Running
Explore the joy of exhilaration with all your appliances loaded with power all the time. With the new auto-switch honda 760R running, your Home Box office will never stop.
Entertainment Uninterupted
Explore the joy of exhilaration with all your appliances loaded with power all the time. With the new auto-switch honda 760R running, your entertainment will never be interrupted.
OPTION 02
Box Office Running
Explore the joy of exhilaration with all your appliances loaded with power all the time. With the new auto-switch honda 760R running, your Home Box office will never stop.
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Thank you Vikram, I will adopt the changes you suggested in the copy. And Im greatly thankful to you all for your support.
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I liked the first option, felt like being close and crisp what the copy was talking.vikram sharma wrote:OPTION 01
Entertainment Uninterupted
Explore the joy of exhilaration with all your appliances loaded with power all the time. With the new auto-switch honda 760R running, your entertainment will never be interrupted.
OPTION 02
Box Office Running
Explore the joy of exhilaration with all your appliances loaded with power all the time. With the new auto-switch honda 760R running, your Home Box office will never stop.
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you have designed the layout with a circuit diagram and a resistance. why so?
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I wanted to the technicalities. Just as a tone of the picture and that is how the current flows from a power source.Paromita wrote:you have designed the layout with a circuit diagram and a resistance. why so?
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I dont know whats the opposite of a resistance, but something like this (resistance : not) should work better.
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