here's my work....

sandeepramje · Post by **sandeepramje** » Fri Jul 28, 2006 10:42 pm

hey,

Well I am still hunting for my first job but now I think I must show some of my work which is in my portfolio so that I can have some feedback over it....well I am basically a designer not copywriter so I appreciate if u analyse my work more as visualiser/designer.

Thx,
Sandeep

Here goes my first work...

bhavsgajjar · Post by **bhavsgajjar** » Fri Jul 28, 2006 11:54 pm

visually. I don't get what you're saying. After a very long hard look I think you're trying to show breasts with the 2 butt ends right? forcing some kind of shape in some already exsisting shape with the "magic" of photoshop doesn't do much these days.

Also, the other 2 cigarettes on the sides...not needed. It's more confusing. you have a bent visual and lots of copy. I feel bent visual and straight simple copy/headline works best and vice-versa.

Just my thoughts...it's your baby though, do what you think is right

cheers!

dillikatau · Post by **dillikatau** » Sat Jul 29, 2006 11:02 am

1. why two other cigrattes
2. why aids sign
3. when you have strong visual idea, try less copy.

keep trying, keep working this is the only mantra to success.
best of luck

sandeepramje · Post by **sandeepramje** » Sat Jul 29, 2006 11:25 am

Thanks for commenting on that ad.....well This ad is to create awareness that breast cancer is caused by Cigarrette smoking........also that ribbon is not for AIDS...it is pink ribbon use for Breast Cancer.....

Pappu · Post by **Pappu** » Tue Aug 01, 2006 3:39 am

i did not figure out those were boobs till i read someone's comments. but i think u could do much better then this.

sandeepramje · Post by **sandeepramje** » Tue Aug 01, 2006 9:22 am

ok..i try to do something regarding this....thx

sandeepramje · Post by **sandeepramje** » Tue Aug 01, 2006 10:07 am

This is a dummy work design for FLAT TV.....

Prasoon · Post by **Prasoon** » Tue Aug 01, 2006 3:01 pm

nice, but i would make both the paintings in the same size as the TV and put the TV visual on the paintings.

you could even make the window in the shape of a window and the real scenary, and that would make it even better.

sandeepramje · Post by **sandeepramje** » Tue Aug 01, 2006 3:17 pm

yep....right i think ur windows idea is more good...thx...i m just beginner in this field and looking for opportunity.....so may be with the time thinking improve like you....thx once again

shantyarow · Post by **shantyarow** » Sat Aug 05, 2006 9:15 pm

Nice tries.
The breast cancer ad with cigarettes somehow felt like mixing oil and water. Like some tohers have said, just 2 ciggies and one crisp line of copy are more than effective. Still, I don't quite get the connection.
As for the flat tv ad, there is an idea there again. But it gets lost in translation. Also has a 'been there, seen that' feel about it. Am sorry, but that's just the way the two ads impacted me. All the best.

sandeepramje · Post by **sandeepramje** » Mon Aug 21, 2006 11:53 pm

hi..guys,

This ad is design for FLAT TV .... lets see whats ur feedbacks. i have to work on art more...still under construction..but u guys can tell me hows the concept

stilll...searching for job...

Thx,

Krish · Post by **Krish** » Tue Aug 22, 2006 1:08 am

excellent. sandeep send this ad to TONIC DUBAI, they handle sony, perhaps they will get u a job.

sandeepramje · Post by **sandeepramje** » Tue Aug 22, 2006 10:12 am

thx...i am trying to send them..

desicreative.com

here's my work....

here's my work....

pritnt ad for Flat TV

Hmm...

flat tv