My Short Shighted Attempt At Long Hand - 69 Condoms

[diveshmehta]

[The Irregular]

I really liked the position of eyes. but the 'free tip' isnt clear to me.

[basant kumar]

Again, poor art direction.

[diveshmehta]

I really liked the position of eyes. but the 'free tip' isnt clear to me.

He would get lucky i.e. he will get chance to have sex with his partner because females don't like t throw things that she can put to use and in this case...condoms...
I'll pass on the message to the art director!

[diveshmehta]

Again, poor art direction.

Again the same suggestion, please comment on the copy if you have time!

[shantyarow]

Divesh, I love long copy ads, if the copy is interesting enough to read.

Don't think an ad for a very nicely named brand such as '69 Condoms' needs so much foreplay (read: body copy.)

The headline should actually have been, "Not tonight, darling." which actually is a classic way of starting 'excuses which women make to not have sex that night. The series (which you can see on the net) goes something to the effect of, "Not tonight, darling, I have...(followed by excuse).

Have fun with your lines. There's lot of potential here to have a 'naughty lines' campaign.

E.g.: "What's the maximum speed of sex?" "68."
"Why?" "Cause from 69 you go in reverse."

[Saumya]

agree. Copy needs more support.

[diveshmehta]

Divesh, I love long copy ads, if the copy is interesting enough to read.

Don't think an ad for a very nicely named brand such as '69 Condoms' needs so much foreplay (read: body copy.)

The headline should actually have been, "Not tonight, darling." which actually is a classic way of starting 'excuses which women make to not have sex that night. The series (which you can see on the net) goes something to the effect of, "Not tonight, darling, I have...(followed by excuse).

Have fun with your lines. There's lot of potential here to have a 'naughty lines' campaign.

E.g.: "What's the maximum speed of sex?" "68."
"Why?" "Cause from 69 you go in reverse."

Thanks for taking out time and replying in detail,
And the second caption is really amazing...
Yes, indeed more foreplay is required.
Thanks!

[diveshmehta]

agree. Copy needs more support.

Thanks Saumya, on the road to betterment!

[DesignBoyz]

we can extend some art support should you need it
for the first ad, we shall do it free

[Anjana Kamat]

hahaha designboyz are pitching for freelance?

[diveshmehta]

we can extend some art support should you need it
for the first ad, we shall do it free

These ads were submitted for a long copy competition!

[basant kumar]

The are many people on hese forums you can pair with, for art direction. There's also a collective from GAO. Check the freelance forum.

[diveshmehta]

The are many people on hese forums you can pair with, for art direction. There's also a collective from GAO. Check the freelance forum.

Thanks for the suggestion, if I ever need help then I shall surely contact them...

[basant kumar]

I realy lve your spirit. Ay new work?