Do Monsters Exist?
Posted: Thu Oct 26, 2006 5:21 pm
Guys can i please have your comments on this ad i made for CRY.
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Do Monsters Exist?
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Posted: Fri Oct 27, 2006 11:38 am
well thought.
Posted: Sun Oct 29, 2006 2:31 pm
art direction needs work....
Posted: Mon Oct 30, 2006 9:26 pm
idea - too damn forced. art - sucks. copy - verbose. overall mssg. is as lost as lost can be.
Posted: Tue Nov 21, 2006 7:19 pm
are u the cig eating akash from mica?
copy-well r u into copy?
copy-well r u into copy?
No!
Posted: Tue Nov 21, 2006 11:51 pm
Akash, I like the sentiment behind this ad.
But frankly it's very badly written.
There are far too many grammatical errors (Headline: Monster's should be Monsters as in plural) and (they falls asleep should be fall asleep) are just 2 I could immediately scan.
Also, I guess you've done the art direction yourself and it is very rough. I can understand you're still breaking your teeth into advertising, but this really needs a lot of work.
Would love to see you give another thwack on this. Do write to me if you need any specific pointers.
But frankly it's very badly written.
There are far too many grammatical errors (Headline: Monster's should be Monsters as in plural) and (they falls asleep should be fall asleep) are just 2 I could immediately scan.
Also, I guess you've done the art direction yourself and it is very rough. I can understand you're still breaking your teeth into advertising, but this really needs a lot of work.
Would love to see you give another thwack on this. Do write to me if you need any specific pointers.
Posted: Wed Nov 22, 2006 5:31 pm
shanty, you are good.... 
Posted: Wed Nov 22, 2006 5:34 pm
Tarun, nice body
Is that you
or SOmebody !
Is that you
or SOmebody !
Posted: Sat Dec 02, 2006 11:32 am
I would like that in a book. But probably I wouldn't read it if Im looking a magazine.
I don't want to look like a guy that thing that is a teacher or an ultra pro guy... I don't know much about ad, but what I see is that. :p
people like the simplest things. maybe you have to think "why would they start to read this and not the other 100 pages of the magazine?"
well, hope that it helps in something.
and about the art direction. Yes, you should try it with an art director :p
good luck, love the story xP
!EYB
I don't want to look like a guy that thing that is a teacher or an ultra pro guy... I don't know much about ad, but what I see is that. :p
people like the simplest things. maybe you have to think "why would they start to read this and not the other 100 pages of the magazine?"
well, hope that it helps in something.
and about the art direction. Yes, you should try it with an art director :p
good luck, love the story xP
!EYB
Monsters do exist- Reworked!!!
Posted: Sun May 20, 2007 7:54 am
Hello people.... thanks for your comments and critics.... appreciate it.... seriously!
anyway.... reworked the ad a bit... its still verbose... but there is a reason for that.... its for my portfolio.... and i wanted to show that i could write long copy!!!
anyway..... check it out... and screw it some more please!
anyway.... reworked the ad a bit... its still verbose... but there is a reason for that.... its for my portfolio.... and i wanted to show that i could write long copy!!!
anyway..... check it out... and screw it some more please!
Posted: Wed May 30, 2007 4:06 pm
lovely thought. but very bad copy. and that does not mean grammatical errors.
Posted: Fri Jun 15, 2007 10:36 am
'Do Monsters exist?' not Monster's my lad...copy error in the headline
Posted: Fri Jun 15, 2007 6:26 pm
Akash - I agree with the others - it is a very nice thought - but I think (and as u have mentioned) you have forcibly converted this ad into a long copy one. I think u should give it a shot with crisper copy. Might just tip the scale. And as far as grammatical errors and spelling mistakes are concerned, please be very careful about them cos they are absolute no-nos, especially if u r showcasing the ad in ur portfolio. Hope this helps - feel free to ask if u have any queries - and all the best dude - I hope u will give it a shot and rework the copy cos the idea is nice. Cheerz!